0:00 - need to get film 4 ident. You might want to start the track over the top of the idents 01:14 - I think the balance of audio/ music is slightly too loud in terms of the music 1:56 - I would cut to the next scene after the title rather than fade
with regard to the party scene, I would aim to make the editing a lot more adventurous, considering the tempo of the music, and I would look at being a lot more expressionistic in terms of the editing together, to create a sense of anarchy and energy (you could even play about with speed, layering of images etc.). it should be really fast, cross-cutty
After he's snorted the coke, you could start playing around with image effects (e.g. colour overlays?) to develop them theme?
A lot of the shots in this sequence are held too long; I would be going for fast cutting, almost like a music video
You could do with more production credits (you only seem to have actor credits at the moment)
The end seems to slightly "fizzle out", although I'm not sure what else you could/ should do... Have a think about it.
I will take everything you've said into consideration sir and will make the changes. Hope it will be possible to come in one lunch time and discuss in more depth what you mean?
0:00 - need to get film 4 ident. You might want to start the track over the top of the idents
ReplyDelete01:14 - I think the balance of audio/ music is slightly too loud in terms of the music
1:56 - I would cut to the next scene after the title rather than fade
with regard to the party scene, I would aim to make the editing a lot more adventurous, considering the tempo of the music, and I would look at being a lot more expressionistic in terms of the editing together, to create a sense of anarchy and energy (you could even play about with speed, layering of images etc.). it should be really fast, cross-cutty
After he's snorted the coke, you could start playing around with image effects (e.g. colour overlays?) to develop them theme?
A lot of the shots in this sequence are held too long; I would be going for fast cutting, almost like a music video
You could do with more production credits (you only seem to have actor credits at the moment)
The end seems to slightly "fizzle out", although I'm not sure what else you could/ should do... Have a think about it.
I will take everything you've said into consideration sir and will make the changes. Hope it will be possible to come in one lunch time and discuss in more depth what you mean?
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